Homework is a waste of time.
It's not that I loved homework but I loved free time more. I believe homework is a waste of time because of the increase of stress, lack of sleep, and headaches. In this essay I will explain why homework is a waste of time do to the safety of our children in our society.
Lack of sleep, this is a problem for kids and parents. This is caused for of them because if the children get a really hard math sheets or a bunch a very hard question's and they can't get it. They ask their parents to help but if the parents don't even get the question themselves then they might stay up until 3:00 in the morning. On top of that if their parents have to get up really early in the morning like at 5:45 like my mother they will be very tired and might sleep in the job get in a car accident or even get fired by their own boss for messing something up something. This also relates to the child's day as well like if they wake up late for school and miss their bus they are going to be very late, and if they have a test that day and they feel like a zombie they might fail the test and their parents might yell at them.
Furthermore headaches, which is when your head hurts really badly. Headaches are caused by a certain amount of stress which hurts and torments the kids. They can also get it by not eating a lot in a large amount of time. This can happen if one day they have a ton of homework and they don't won't to do it they just want to play their video games like most kids, but the kids parents said you have to do your homework first. The kid probably would get really mad and start fuming and turning all red. After they might stomp up the stairs and lock themselves in their own room until l the next morning. Locking yourself in you room for a very long time can torture you and your parents.
Moreover increase of stress. The increase of stress can decrease your life span. Homework is a major stress causer for intermediate and teenager students because after school they just want to go out with their friend and go see a movie or such .They also probably want to go on Facebook msn or text the night away. Then when they get back or finish whatever they are doing they found out that they had to right an entire essay they start to stress out and speed threw it for the sake of getting it done and there work is really sloppy. Stress can shorten your life depending on the amount of stress. This is proven by scientists.
I do think homework is a waste of time for the issues such as high level of stress, people not getting insignificant amount of sleep, and the injury concerns for our community. So is homework a waste of time? Well I say yes so come on together we can end homework forever.
Justin.
Dear justin,
ReplyDeletei really liked the hook in the introduction."its not that i loved homework but i loved freetime more"that totaly made me laugh. I think the thesis is well stated, and again restated differently in the conclusion.
A few things that i would adjust is that there was a grammer mistake in the first body paragraph " this is caused for of them" Another grammer mistake was you put "something up something"whoops! overall a good essay written by a super awesome person keep up the good work.
Dear Justin,
ReplyDeleteThe Essay you have written has true points that probably happens to some of us.Your essay proves that homework is a waste of time.One thing you can do is add some question marks. Other than that your essay is great and your choice of words.
From Hrishi
Dear Justin,
ReplyDeleteIn my opinion, I think that you did a great job on your essay. I love how you added detail to mostly all of your sentences. I also like how you added a lot of enthusiasm with your opinion on the introduction. Next time you right an essay, use more logical words. Above all you did a superb job (thumbs up).
Dear Justin,
ReplyDeleteThe Essay you have written has true points that probably happens to some of us.Your essay proves that homework is a waste of time.One thing you can do is add some question marks. Other than that your essay is great and your choice of words.
From Hrishi
Dear Justin.L,
ReplyDeleteYour topic of the intro was stated well. There was also a very great hook in the introduction. I think you should get rid of is 'In this essay...' because its boring and a bad way to end an intro. I thought your conclusion was attention grabbing and that it was really strong. You should reread your paragraph because there are a few mistakes! other wise it was great!
Kris
Dear Justin L
ReplyDeleteI really liked how you began your essay. It really caught my attention, and how you ended it as well. I also like how you used words that were strong like in the conclusion paragraph where you stated "not getting insignificant amount of". You have a few grammar mistakes like in paragraph two where you stated "get a really hard math sheets or a bunch a very hard question's" when you would probably want to write, get really hard math sheets or a bunch of very hard questions. You also had a punctuation error in paragraph two where you stated "child's day as well like if they wake". You forgot to add a comma in between as well and like if. Overall I really liked your entertaining essay.
Dear Justin,
ReplyDeleteYou have written an excellent essay here. The sharp grabbing hook you used was something to catch my attention. I was so absorbed after, that when you were trying to tell me something i didn't answer! The hook was "It's not that I loved homework but I loved free time more." That was excellent! You had supporting body paragraphs and your opinion that homework was a waste of time was well explained throughout the essay. My favorite supporting details you had used were when you were talking about headaches and stress. Although it was very well written you did have some mistakes such as when you meant want in the 3rd paragraph you put won't. Another mistake was "something up something" in the second paragraph. The clincher was good but not as excellent as the rest of the essay. You have to remember to be strong at the end. It lets the reader remember your essay. Other then those three minor mistakes, you had an awesome, funny, and well-written essay.
Dear Justin,
ReplyDeleteYour essay was spectacular. I loved how detailed you got in each body paragraph. It really made your essay more interesting. Each of your paragraphs had a clear and great topic that supported your opinion like all three were homework gives a lack of sleep, homework developes headaches and it increases stress. Next time you might want to work on your hook to further grab the readers attention. You should also add a quote in your essay to make it even more interesting.
from Josh