Name: Anthonia
Teacher: Ms. Babb
Date: Saturday, February-25, 2012
Homework is a waste of time
Why don't kids go outside to play? Why do kids always ask for more sleep whenever mom or dad wakes them up in the morning? At last, why don't kids spend time with their family? Sure, there are a lot of
answers to these questions, but the main one is Homework! Homework is a waste of time. I understand that homework improves our grade but we can't do a good job if we're not alert and awake.
"If students stay up late to do homework they won't get the 10-11 hours of sleep they need to function and do well in school" said John .T. Parents do not like it when they have to attempt to wake their children 5 times before they become alert. This is because the children are tired. Less sleep is bad for the health of a growing child. More work, all together with their social life and the crisis at home are very stressful. Stress is a very dangerous dilemma to have at times.
Aside from stress and lack of sleep, exercise is another benefit that is taken away by homework. Parents say that kids do not get enough exercise. Clearly, they have no idea that the cause of this predicament is homework. Everyone thinks that it's because of television and time constantly spent on the Internet, but I think it is the homework. With too much work, playing outside is not an alternative. Exercise is an important asset to our health and also is Vitamin D from the sun.
Parents value the knowledge and education their children acquire from school, but the y value family time more. They argue that they don't see, talk or spend time with their kids. It may be because they work too much or because the kids have too many assignments. Although, they have so much work they try to make time for their kids. If that little time is not used, because the children are too busy with homework, the
parents feel that all they did was for nothing. It is sad when you do a deed that becomes a waste in the end.
Therefore, if homework is no more assigned, kids will exercise more. Parents will get their family time and sleep would finally be enjoyed. All this would be accomplished because of the abandonment of homework.
Moreover, homework counts as about 60% of your grade. You can still achieve that 60% from tests and quizzes. Not withstanding the fact that you can study before the tests.
Dear Anthonia,
ReplyDeleteI think you did an excellent job on this essay. I like your thesis sentence in your introduction, really grabbed my attention to read on. Great choice of words. I think you should state your paragraphs a bit more clearer and I found one mistake but i wasn't sure if it was meant to be a 'y'. (Paragraph 3)
Dear Anthonia,
ReplyDeleteThat was a great essay.You used true facts that prove you are correct.The intro grabs the readers attention.One thing you can do is get to the point faster.Other than that the essay was great.
From Hrish,
Dear Anthonia,
ReplyDeleteI really liked you intro paragraph, your points are clearly stated very well.Your clincher at the end was fascinating and i liked the word choice "predicament" Although i think you made a grammar mistake when you said "if homework is no more assigned" Good job you deserve an A!
Dear Anthonia,
ReplyDeleteYour hook really grabbed my attention and, you clearly explain your belief in the introducton. Your thesis is not restated in the conclusion paragraph and you could have used adverbs and phrases. Other than that is was a really well done.
Dear Antonia,
ReplyDeleteI really loved how you used various different types of strong convincing words like in paragraph two when you stated "Stress is a very dangerous dilemma", and in the conclusion paragraph where you stated "Therefore, if homework is no more assigned". I also like how you added facts. Like in the conclusion paragraph where you stated "Moreover, homework counts as about 60% of your grade". I have noticed that you only have five paragraphs when you were supposed to have six.you also had a grammar mistake in the conclusion paragraph where you stated " if homework is no more assigned" when it was supposed to be if homework is not assigned or given. Other than that overall your essay was very well written.
Dear Anthonia,
ReplyDeletei think it was good that you added some quotes in your essay and that you threw in some rhetorical questions. However, i thought that you could have made your essay better by using an anecdote and maybe you could also try to grab the attention of readers with something else and then link that to homework in some way
Dear Anthonia,
ReplyDeleteYou wrote this essay so well that it was diabolical! You had me at the beginning with the series of rhetorical questions. Then i was even more blown away by the number of logical connectives you used in this essay. At the end though when you kinda defeated your own argument when you said "Not with standing the fact that students can study before a test." First of all wonderful connective. Second of all wouldn't that be assigned as homework, most likely. You write well but remember to think of what you wrote.
Dear: Anthonia,
ReplyDeleteI loved your essay; your hook in your introduction paragraph really caught my attention.
Your choose of words were grate but one thing you could have done is make your essay more clear. Over all it was awesome!
From: Victoria
Dear: Anthonia,
ReplyDeleteI loved your essay; your hook in your introduction paragraph really caught my attention.
Your choose of words were grate but one thing you could have done is make your essay more clear. Over all it was awesome!
From: Victoria
Dear Anthonia
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed your thesis sentence it was very well done. You had a very even amount of facts and quotes which was great. This essay doesnt really need a lot improvement i think you could add some more emotive language just because I know you are a fantastic writer. Over all great job and keep doing your best.
Dear Anthonia
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed the thesis sentence you used. Good job on your hook. I liked how you evened out the facts and the quotes. You could add a little more emotive language just because I know your a great writer. Over all keep up the good work.