Name: Mistica
Teacher: Ms. Babb
Grade: 7
Date: Wednesday 29 February 2012
Homework is not a waste of time
I honestly believe that homework is definitely not a waste of time. Homework is the only thing that allows children to be able to concentrate on their school studies at home. Homework also allows children to spend more time with their parents and guardians, while also discussing what they have been learning during school hours.
First of all if students are bored and have nothing to do at home they would be tempted to surf the internet or watch Television. Therefore as a distraction, if students had homework to complete they would not be able to do any of these unnecessary things since they would have no time. As a result students would not be ruining their superior eyesight and wasting their precious time. Instead they would be doing something very useful, using their time wisely and also learning something NEW every second!
Second of all, I certainly understand that at the end of the school day children are eager to go home and take a rest from all the tiring school work they have been completing. Moreover, if students do not review what they have learnt the previous days they would easily be able to forget all the important lessons they have learnt at school. This leads to a very unsatisfying grade level as well as unsatisfied parents and guardians. Daisy Fuentes has clearly quoted "You have got to pay attention, you have got to study and you have to do your homework. You have to score higher than everybody else, because at the end your education will back you up." This means that homework and studies will always have your back when nobody else does because education is your future and your life. Do you think that without homework the students would achieve something constructive in life?
Third of all, homework prepares students for the next upcoming school day. For an example, Students will be learning addition in math at school tomorrow. So, on the previous day if their teacher gives the students an addition worksheet to complete for the tonight, the students would be unbelievably and incredibly prepared for the next day's essential addition lesson.
Finally, I think that homework not only teases student's brains and lets students think a lot more sharply but, it also helps their brains to understand much more efficiently, professionally and clearly. Homework also helps their brains to understand the problem solving method more easily as they go. This is why I believe that homework is definitely not a waste of valuable time. Children SHALL defiantly have homework to help them concentrate in school and not lack off with their studies.
Hey Mistica,your essay is amazing! I really like the strong language that you used like moreover,efficiently,incredibly,and many more. Also,each of your body paragraphs clearly state your reasons of why you think that homework isn't a waste of time with a bunch of great supporting details. The two things that you should work on is your clincher in your conclusion and the hook in the introduction.
ReplyDeleteDear Mistica,
ReplyDeleteI like how you stated facts like how homework prepares a student for the next day and that you quoted Daisy Fuentes by saying "You have got to pay attention, you have got to study and you have to do your homework. You have to score higher than everybody else, because at the end your education will back you up." However I thought you could improve by using a sense of humour in the body of the essay. You could also add a few shocking facts or something like that
Dear Mistica,
ReplyDeleteVery nicely done. I understood most of your statement of why homework is not a waste of time. Nice word choice. I think you should improve your hook because it wouldn't exactly grab my attention right away. Also, I think you should of put more details in your body paragraphs. Other than that, great job!
Dear Mistica,
ReplyDeleteYour essay was one of the essays that grabbed my attention the most. Even though only part of my mind was actually interested in the beginning, when you quoted Daisy Fuentes' spectacular quote I was hooked. One of my opinions for you is that you should have used that at the beginning. You also used a lot of logical connectives including moreover, therefor, and as a result of. You kept me absorbed as well by using interesting words such as incredibly, valuable, superior, and constructive. You are a very good essay writer though next time try to start your paragraphs with something a little different each time.
Dear Me,
ReplyDeleteI really like how I tried to use many descriptive words. For an example in paragraph two where i stated "ruining their superior eyesight and wasting their precious time". I also like how I used a quote from a celebrity in paragraph three where I stated "Daisy Fuentes has clearly quoted 'You have got to pay attention, you have got to study and you have to do your homework. You have to score higher than everybody else, because at the end your education will back you up'". i think i should have added more sentences in paragraph four. I also think the third paragraph was kind of confusing. Overall I like it.