Homework is a waste of time!!
Is homework a waste of time and does homework destroying our freedom and happiness. If you want no homework and tell people that homework is a waste of time. Then listen well because this is my point of view and it may help you.
The first reason why homework is a waste of time. Is that some kids have chores to do but they cannot do them because they homework. If they don't there chores they get in trouble and they get grounded. So if you think this is right fight for the power.
The second reason why homework is a waste of time. Is that most students have after school programs and won't be able to finish their homework. This is a point but it is my weakest point out of all the points.
The third reason why homework is a waste of time. Is that the work that we got to do at home is just a review of what we did at school. We, as kids can memorize easily since our brains are always developing. This is a point I like and it is a very strong point.
This is the end of my point of view why homework is a waste of time. Hoped you enjoyed these points about this debate.
Dear Stalaane,
ReplyDeleteWell you did a good job summarizing you point of view which was good but could have been more clearer in your conclusion. Also you do have three body paragraphs which are perfectly good, but i think you can add a bit more than 4 or 5 paragraphs.Also i think that you should use connective words like furthermore, moreover,(etc) instead of first, second,and third. Keep up the work.
Dear Stalaane,
ReplyDeleteI really liked an argument in paragraph four where you stated "the work that we got to do at home is just a review of what we did at school". I also like another argument in paragraph three where you stated "students have after school programs and won't be able to finish their homework". You had many grammar mistakes like in paragraph one where you stated "If you want no homework and tell people that homework is a waste of time" another one was in paragraph two where you stated "kids have chores to do but they cannot do them because they homework". I think you may have wanted to say that kids may have chores to do but they cannot do them because homework comes in there way. Your paragraphs where also very very short and only had two to three sentences in each. you also did not include any strong words, sentences or quotes that hook the reader's attention. Overall I think your essay was okay.
Hi Stalaane!
ReplyDeleteWhat i liked about your paragraph is that you used a few, strong adjectives and you made your topic clear in the introduction. A few things that you could improve on would be to add more detail into your paragraphs, also, to make your introduction more attention grabbing. Overall, your essay was great!